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Nosferatu

a melted reflection
the nose of a gorilla, skin that flakes and falls like ash.
it wasn't always so, but I'm getting used to it.
I've had to do a lot of adapting.
you start to not mind having a vestigial liver,
or any other organ, for that matter.
who misses having to take a leak?
not me.
a back-alley bite to the neck just like in the movies.
I woke up and couldn't look in a mirror without being sick.
but I'm getting used to it.
like I said, I've gotten used to a lot.
stalking my own alleys now, though not for company—
I'm not misery. books are so melodramatic.
I've got syringes, tubes, jars, tranquilizers
all clean, however they look.
(the pickings from laboratory dumpsters aren't great)
just a small donation, thanks
you get a bandage when I'm done
and a great story to tell at parties.
I do five or six a night so they don't spend a week on the verge of collapse.
I'm that nice a gal, however I look.
just trying to make it day by day
or night by night
like anyone else.
it's no worse than being alive—
just different.
©2006-2009 ~Dumpysaurus
:icondumpysaurus:

Author's Comments

I decided to upload this first of all my poetry. I don't think it's my best, and it's not very representative of my work, but I felt more comfortable posting it than some of the others, which tend to be much more personal and. . . strange.
So! Constructive critique is very welcome. The main reason I've even considered posting this stuff is that I need feedback. Without workshop in Creative Writing, I can't know what works and doesn't work in my poetry. I need people to tell me.
(Things I want input on: punctuation, capitalization, tone, rythym, whether or not it resonates... anything else you can think of!)

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:iconyukni:
Nice. I like the character in this, she seems quite orderly and even a little bit considerate when she FEEDS. In all seriousness, I rather liked it. I LIKED IT A LOT.

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“Christianity, if false, is of no importance, and if true, of infinite importance. The only thing it cannot be is moderately important.”
:iconobsidiansea:
*needs more of your poetry*
...
*NEEDS*

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MOVED TO ~homeobox
:iconayeaka:
I take this is of who I think it is? :)

Loved what I saw of her in the rp, if so. And I miss her, (and our rp) muchly.

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"Everything is miraculous. It is miraculous that one does not melt in one's bath."

- Pablo Picasso

"Oh my stars and garters!"

-Beast


:iconkaneandy:
Great work...:P

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"Death is life and life is death depending on how you live it, you live death in your life, if all you do in your life, is avoid death..." SERJ TANKIAN
:icondumpysaurus:
Hooray! Your opinion means a lot (BECAUSE YOU'RE COOL). The voice in this poem is based on one of my characters--Arjay, who I need to draw more often.

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"Life is too important to be taken seriously." -Oscar Wilde
:icondumpysaurus:
That's an encouraging response! I'll post some more. :w00t:

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"Life is too important to be taken seriously." -Oscar Wilde
:icondumpysaurus:
It's certainly based on Arjay, who uses the same method detailed in the poem.
I miss the rp, too... we should start a new one! Maybe! Because my brain could still be closer to exploding! :XD:

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"Life is too important to be taken seriously." -Oscar Wilde
:icondumpysaurus:
Zankya kindly, Andrieu.

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"Life is too important to be taken seriously." -Oscar Wilde
:iconayeaka:
Mhmm, starting a new one would work nicely. xD; I have..improved muchly since the start of that rp.

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"Everything is miraculous. It is miraculous that one does not melt in one's bath."

- Pablo Picasso

"Oh my stars and garters!"

-Beast


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